M3/D1 - Unit 21

 M3 - Unit 21     

Black - Original answer and question

Green - Improved answer

Red - Why feedback was useful

What genre is your show?

Because you seem to have two narrative structures happening at the same time you have the person going missing and you have the horrifying creepy nuns. I think you need to decide which it is. Is it that you are creating this horror style drama where you have this order of nuns that are creating rituals, et cetera or is it that you have a mystery of somebody going missing that you are then , figuring out what happened I think you need to pick which one of those

The main narrative will be that the friend group don't trust Lucas when he says that he sees things since hes skitzophenric, and he sees a nun and gets caught by the nuns and he goes missing, the nuns dont do anything but try to turn him into one but the narrative will mainly be about the friends consequences of using drugs. this feedback was useful because my series will not be at risk of discrimination against nuns which will appeal to more people and wont be seen as discriminative series, in my series i will not have any bad comments about nuns and i will have nun outfits

You’ve mentioned a lot of cliffhangers happening at the end of every episode. Can you give me examples of those?

For instance, at the end of episode one are we going to see a creepy nun? Grab a teenage boy so we don’t see what happens to him? Are we going to see a bunch of blood and not know who’s blood? It is? Are we going to see a bunch of people screaming and don’t know what they’re screaming at.

 At the start Lucas will have his first skitzophenric  attack, where he sees things that arent there and ends up in hospital, then after a week he comes out with his friends and they all smoke, which helped lucas at the moment but later on we see the consequences, each episode will hear a noise and sudden movement on the camera and the episode will go black and in the next scene we see lucas in a hospital bed. this feedback was useful because i now have a clear understanding on wat types of cliffhangers i will be including in my series. such as a scream in the end of the first episode and it will go to black

If you’re gonna go with a horror theme, you need to think about what conventions you’ll use. for instance you’re obviously using jump scares to make the audience build in anticipation. You also seem to have the theme of drug usage or “sin” causing death destruction or pain to the character.

 I will show drugs in a bad why so that it discourgaes young audiences from using them, it is informative and links to users and gratification this helped me to understnad that i cant use/show drugs as much as i wanted to in my series because it may encourage the younger audience to do drugs, i will show the repercussion and will not glorify the use of smoking. I will do this by showing the harmful impact of smoking weed and will go to the POV of lucas where he sees things that arent there and we see how paranoid which link to my theme of horror

You also mention the long-term effects of drugs and how that can cause schizophrenia how are you gonna accurately portray this?

Weed is linked to causing skitzopheria, and lucas already has it after all the friend joking about it for years, he has his first breakdown and no one knew he was actually skitzohpernic. And itll show how lucas acts normal when hes sober but when he smokes hes very scared and ovetthinks etc. this feedback helped me to understand how i will be showing skitzopernia because the way i was going to show skitzophenria may offend some people however now i can show it without having to worry about people being offended and his friends will be helping him to encourage the younger audience to help out friends 

Are you gonna make sure that you have a mental health advisor on set in the writers room in order to make sure that you aren’t being stereotypical in your representation? Also think you only need to have one character with schizophrenia at the beginning of the show as a post to All the characters have schizophrenic breaks further in the show I think having that character with schizophrenia struggling with that that is the quality story. They’re seeing his parents deal with managing his seeing him pushback at wanting to be notable seeing him the difference you can be when you’re having a schizophrenic break and when you’re healthy mentally the difference in that person can be massive and how that affects the people that love him, maybe he’s not schizophrenic before the show but maybe that’s what happens in episode one and we see his manic Ness manifest in these nuns only for us to was left on the cliffhanger in episode six as to whether or not they were part of his schizophrenic break or whether it was like a joint delusion or if they are real.

 At first lucas is shown as a normal teenager and not a scruff like the others in the friend group, but when he smokes outside the church, he has his first breakdown which triggers the disruption. this feedback helped me to build my friend group characters and have a clear on the way i show the friend group and build the character through showing their old activities and we see some of the friend groups family and past experiences 

Are you narrative or character based?

Mainly narrtive based, because my aim is to discourage young audiences from using drugs, however the character backgrounds will link in aswell because we see how it makes them upset and shows us why they chose to start smoking this helped me to understand how i will build the story of my narrative and how i will show the friend group and build their character through how they act in the scenes 

You have a lot of narrative happening here which could mean that your narrative driven and if so you need to figure out what those really clear lines of narrative are so that you’re not getting your themes crossed over where is if your character-based you need to pick that main character who struggling with schizophrenia and you need to focus on that and that alone and how his mental health issues can affect everybody around him personally I think that’s the strongest story having hints at the nuns later on.

Yes hes only seen as someone who struggles when he starts smoking at the church, after his breakdown and interaction with the nuns he is seen as a very quiet and scared person and doesn't talk alot, however his friends support him rather than bullying him like they did before the breakdown this creates a good ending to my series, this is because i am able to show that people can be happy without the things they are addicted to if they are able to over come the challenges they have in life

My reflection 

Overall, I believe my pitch went well, i had a clear understand on what my narrative would be but didnt have a full understanding on how i was going to potray my friend group, however now i know that i will include females instead of just males in my series. I had a clear understanding on how i was going to show drugs in my show, which will be fake props and will not be shown in a good way to discourage my audience from using drugs. I knew how i was going to show nuns in my series. I was confident throught my whole pitch and answered the questions as well as i could, and i have made changes from some of the quesrions i was unsure about.

M2 - Unit 21

M2 - Unit 21

Potential Questions

• Are you worried that you may offend people by talking about schizophrenia? 
• No i will show how it can have benefits and its not mainly about schizophrenia its more about the repercussions of using drugs and skitzohprenia has involvements with weed so it will link well, it will show how it affects his everyday life but it wont be in a negative way
• What other media texts did you take inspiration from?
• Suits, IT, Friday 13th, they are horror films that have inspired my idea but then it links to suits because it shows the consequences of using drugs so my series will be informative 
• How will you market your idea 
• A new series will release each week on BBC and when the whole series is done it will be uploader to iPlayer so that people can bingewatch, i will also have many social media posts and there will be billboard in popular areas such as leeds trainstation. There will be a radio trailer aswell they i will make and put it on social media and it will also be played on the BBC radio
• How will you create it with such a small budget?
• I will use clothes that the actor already own so that i dont have to buy costumes since it is a sterotypical teen group of friends. I will use public locations once i have permission so that i dont have to pay for the location, and i wont include that many songs, i will aim to use a popular song aatleast 1 every 2 epsidoes
• What is the aim of your idea?
• My aim is to keep my audience entertained through jumpscares, comedy and overall i want them to see the consequences of using drugs heavily, which is why it is called look as the younger audiences need to relise how serious it can be and they should ruin thier lives from a young age.

What genre is your show?

Because you seem to have two narrative structures happening at the same time you have the person going missing and you have the horrifying creepy nuns. I think you need to decide which it is. Is it that you are creating this horror style drama where you have this order of nuns that are creating rituals, et cetera or is it that you have a mystery of somebody going missing that you are then , figuring out what happened I think you need to pick which one of those

The main narrative will be that the friend group don't trust Lucas when he says that he sees things since hes skitzophernic, and he sees a nun and gets cought by the nuns and he goes missing, the nuns dont do anything but try to turn him into one but the narrtive will mainly be about the friends consequences of using drugs.

 

You’ve mentioned a lot of cliffhangers happening at the end of every episode. Can you give me examples of those?

For instance, at the end of episode one are we going to see a creepy nun? Grab a teenage boy so we don’t see what happens to him? Are we going to see a bunch of blood and not know who’s blood? It is? Are we going to see a bunch of people screaming and don’t know what they’re screaming at.

 At the start Lucas will have his first skitz attack, where he sees things that arent there and ends up in hospital, then after a week he comes out with his firneds and they all smoke, which helped lucas at the moment but later on we see the consequences, each episode will hear a noise and sudden movement on the camera and the episode will go black and in the next scene we see lucas in a hospital bed.

If you’re gonna go with a horror theme, you need to think about what conventions you’ll use. for instance you’re obviously using jump scares to make the audience build in anticipation. You also seem to have the theme of drug usage or “sin” causing death destruction or pain to the character.

 I will show drugs in a bad why so that it discourgaes young audiences from using them, it is informative and links to users and gratification

You also mention the long-term effects of drugs and how that can cause schizophrenia how are you gonna accurately portray this?

Weed is linked to causing skitzopheria, and lucas already has it after all the friend joking about it for years, he has his first breakdown and no one knew he was actually skitzohpernic. And itll show how lucas acts normal when hes sober but when he smokes hes very scared and ovetthinks etc.

Are you gonna make sure that you have a mental health advisor on set in the writers room in order to make sure that you aren’t being stereotypical in your representation? Also think you only need to have one character with schizophrenia at the beginning of the show as a post to All the characters have schizophrenic breaks further in the show I think having that character with schizophrenia struggling with that that is the quality story. They’re seeing his parents deal with managing his seeing him pushback at wanting to be notable seeing him the difference you can be when you’re having a schizophrenic break and when you’re healthy mentally the difference in that person can be massive and how that affects the people that love him, maybe he’s not schizophrenic before the show but maybe that’s what happens in episode one and we see his manic Ness manifest in these nuns only for us to was left on the cliffhanger in episode six as to whether or not they were part of his schizophrenic break or whether it was like a joint delusion or if they are real.

 At first lucas is shown as a normal teenager and not a scruff like the others in the friend group, but when he smokes outside the church, he has his first breakdown which triggers the disruption.

Are you narrative or character based?

Mainly narrtive based, because my aim is to discourage young audiences from using drugs, however the character backgrounds will link in aswell because we see how it makes them upset and shows us why they chose to start smoking

You have a lot of narrative happening here which could mean that your narrative driven and if so you need to figure out what those really clear lines of narrative are so that you’re not getting your themes crossed over where is if your character-based you need to pick that main character who struggling with schizophrenia and you need to focus on that and that alone and how his mental health issues can affect everybody around him personally I think that’s the strongest story having hints at the nuns later on.

Yes hes only seen as someone who struggles when he starts smoking at the church, after his breakdown and interaction with the nuns he is seen as a very quiet and scared person and doesnt talk alot, however his friends support him rather than bullying him like they did before the breakdown 

Overall i believe i presented my pitch well because i had flashcards to help prompt me and i also changed my final draft to make it more simple so its easy to understand for my audience, this means i could still across my key points whilst still keeping the pitch brief. I also included images on my slides to help the audience understand what i was talking about and included images of my actors within my presentation.

I improved the way my pitch looked, before it was blank with just writing and it was too krammed, however in my final pitch it had more images and less writing but i still had enough to read on my flashcards to get across the key points, i improved my episode breakdown alot by explaining the key points such as the disruption instead of explaining it in depth which keeps my audience hooked. 

 M1 - Unit 21

I have chose look out of all these options. This is because it will be the easiest to film and easy to keep within budget because there won't be as many visual effects and soundtracks, which means I can keep my costs low, I can also film in local locations to keep on my budget and use more on the equipment so that the quality looks good. I cn film in ny graveyard aslong as I get permission, whereas in the other ones I would have had to use paid locations and may have had to close down some streets in order to film forged. Mirror would have been very complicated to film because it would have a lot of transition into other locations meaning I would have to spend more on the locations. LOOK is also better because it is a hybrid genre where I can keep my audience entertained whilst still keeping them on edge and scared. It also raises awarenesses for problems that a lot of people have and shows the repercussions of using drugs that while they may help at the time, it will come back and be worse. 

 P4 - Unit 21 

I used the flashcards as seen in my pitch video, I didnt write much on them it was just to guide me through the slides and it was summed up, i read the key details such as my episode breakdown from the power point and looked up to engage with my audience regually. However i didnt mamange to get photos of the flashcards. 

I also used prompts such as these to help me with episode breakdown and my proposal, I also wrote short sentences on my flashcards to help me remember key points of each slide

P3 - Unit 21

 P3 - Unit 21

Overall I believe that my pitch went well, I delivered my pitch well but I didn't look at my audience very often, this was probably due to the fact that I didn't make any flashcards. I kept my slides simple and didnt have any images, which I should have included for the character profiles slide, so i will add this into my new PowerPoint. I had a good representation of what my logo would look like, creepy writing and red eyes and a nun in the letters O's. However i could have gone into alot more detail in my slides as i kept it quite brief, i didnt announce my episode break down as it wasnt done and didnt make sense, so i plan to improve that quickly in my detail but still keep it short so my audience doesnt get bored. I also didnt include any specific music or soundtracks, but there will be creepy dark music such as deep pitch pianos. 

Final Draft

 P2 - Unit 21

 

Character profiles

This is the gorup of friends, it will also include thier mothers and girlfriends who ocasionally come out to smoke with them.

Lucas will be the skitzophernic who has his first breakdown at the start and they find out he is actually skitzophenic, and the other friends liam xander kuba jack are all bullying him in a jokey way and then they stop after they relise he actually has skitzophernia

P1 - Unit 21

P1 - Unit 21

Forged was based on fast and furious but with action so it would be a hybrid genre of racing and action, it was about two gangs that found out there was a new super turbo made by the government and they were both doing a drag race for half a million. And they both fight over it the main gang leader dies in the fight and the other gang leader dies in the drag race.

Mirror was about derealisation where a guy believes he isnt real and lives two lives, he first has his breakdown when looking into a mirror and sees someone else and then lives thier life for a while and randomly switches back, however it wasnt derealisation

Look is about the consequences of using drugs, it is a horror and comedy drama where a group of friends are smoking drugs, and they find nuns in a church and a friend has a skitzophernic breakdown